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 Pizza Party Open in new Window. [E]
Making a pizza on Halloween can be fun with kids and extra ingredients.It looked like fun.
by Dorianne Author Icon
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Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job with the personification of the pizza ingredients and the epulaeryu is a great poetry form for this subject matter. It's a new form for me, but I'm excited to give it a try!


*Firework* Suggestions

The only small suggestion I have is that "Pizza Party" felt like a slightly inaccurate title given that the poem was about the pizza ingredients themselves, personifying them, and making the pizza. There wasn't anything in the poem that seemed "party" related, except maybe the last line, so I can't help but think there might be a better title for this poem that would give readers a clearer picture of what they're about to read.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. Well done!


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