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by KingsSideCastle Author Icon
         Review for entry/chapter: "Top Hat" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi KingsSideCastle Author Icon,

I am reviewing your poem, "Top Hat" Open in new Window., on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" Open in new Window.. It is for Week 22 of "I Write in 2024" Open in new Window..

Please remember these views are purely my own and any advice given is with the sole intention of being helpful.

First Impressions: This little poem made me smile. When I read the prompt, I wondered how one could write about a hat. I'd no idea what I would've had to say. But you have captured the top hat really well.

Voice/Tone: The tone is light and amusing. It almost feels as though you are the magician standing on stage and performing the trick with the rabbit in the hat. Which, I think, was probably your intention when you wrote it.

Mechanics: I love your aabb, ccdd rhyme scheme. Each rhyme is spot on, and this helps to move the poem along at a great pace, keeping it light and fun. I really like the gif you have added at the end, showing the trick of the rabbit in the hat. It makes the poem even more appealing.

My Favourite Part: "A classic look from eras jazzy." That made me chuckle. Your rhyme of snazzy with jazzy is pure genius. I would never have even attempted to find a rhyme for snazzy. I also love how the first verse shows the hat, demonstrating how it is just an ordinary hat with nothing in it, and the second verse shows the magical appearance of the rabbit. This poem is actually the magic trick. Love it!

Suggestions: I guess, to be super picky, I would say to add a comma in the final line. I would put it after inside. Other than that, I think this poem is perfect.

Your poem is engaging and entertaining. I really enjoyed reading this.

Keep writing!

Choconut

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