Hi nomlet

Congratulations on your Writing.com account anniversary! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion.


Positives

I really enjoyed the amount of detail and description you managed to fit into such a short item. With less than 300 words to work with, that's not easy to do!


Suggestions

The extent of the injury felt a little off in terms of intensity. From the way it's described, it sounds like a really grievous injury, but the language of the story, as well as Kyle's reaction to it (i.e., just deciding that maybe he'd try the bike trick another day) kind of shrugs it off as routine.


Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable, well-written story. Nice work!


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Jeff
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