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 A Rainy Night's Encounter Open in new Window. [13+]
Without knowing the consequences, I let a stranger into my house, and this happened...
by U' Will Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi William,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with contentment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the late night caller is in trouble. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who lives alone and gets a late night visitor he is unsure about. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)I opened the door as I saw a man-"as" should be "and".

2)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.

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