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What I liked:

*Bulletv* What a fantastic memory. You got to open for a Neil Sedaka concert! That's incredible. I can only imagine how nervous you were beforehand. I would probably have tripped over my feet on the walk to the piano. Those were fifteen minutes of true fame. However, I don't think those minutes were nearly as precious to you as the time you spent with your Nanny. I am always interested in reading about happy childhood memories of grandparents because three of mine passed away before I was born, and I never knew either of my grandmothers. So reading about the piano lessons your Nanny gave you really warms my heart.

*Bulletv* I love that you have this amazing musical talent. I can't tell you how envious I am. I had some piano lessons as a child, but I gave up after about a year because I was more interested in playing with my friends. Oh, if only I had known how much I would come to regret that. I did end up playing the drums in a band as a teenager, but I never went back to the piano. It must be an incredible feeling to know your instrument so well you can sit and play and make beautiful music.

*Bulletv* Another thing that made me smile when reading this was the way you described your young son bringing his blanket to where you were playing and snuggling up, letting the music lull him to sleep. That's a really special memory.


Suggestions:

"I would go to my uncle's house and she would listen to me practice." When I first read this, it confused me. On re-reading, it is clear you are referring to your grandmother, but in this sentence, it sounds as though you are calling your uncle she. It threw me at first.


Parting comments:

I have enjoyed reading this short personal essay. Your memories of music, and the bonds it has cemented over the years, are fantastic. Thank you for sharing.


Choconut
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