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First drum set Open in new Window. [E]
My friend gave his 2 year old a drum set! Can you hear him play?
by Kåre เลียม Enga Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Reading* THE POEM

The poem is about a boy with a drum set.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

This is a very visual poem. I could picture a boy banging away, smiling, and having a blast.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem with no set rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to augment the visual aspect of the poem.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: Rat-tat-tat and a boom-boom-boom, crash-crash-crash cacophonous tunes" This phrase/line brings to life the banging on the drum. It's not only visual, but it's very auditory.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader and makes them want to tap with their feet. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I love how the poem sounds when it's read outloud. A fun, playful read that captures the spirt of a toddler.

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