Hello Jim Hall .

I am reviewing your story/entry as a fellow student for the Basics of Erotica class. Almost missed this one since I got distracted by something else in the forum and you post right away at the beginning of the week. Glad I double checked so that I can give you my random thoughts over things.

First Impression: This does a nice job in continuing the story from what happened in week 2 where things blew up between the character. We found out the one is a vampire last time but it was near the end. Now we get to see how the other character comes to terms with the situation, since there is going to be relationship and/or sexual intimacy between the characters as we are doing a class about writing erotica. We get some information about vampires within the world of the story that was interesting while also fixing a struggle that had happened in the previous one, which I feel will then set up the next. I did look at the assignment so know we get to move forward on the intimacy moving forward.

Prompt/Assignment: You took a little bit of a different approach with the assignment. I wasn't sure at first where it was going in relation to that since you were trying to tie things up from where you left things while also adding the conversation about sexual preferences or even possible kinks. I forgot about the senses thing in the assignment, looked back at what we were supposed to write. You do get some near the end with the physical/energy connection. We also get a little suggestion as to how intense things could be between two vampires, so that could be interesting for a reader. I can't say for sure that I really know anything about the character and what appeals to them, in particular, but the story itself makes sense. And it will connect well with the next part.

Characters/Story: You do really well in using the assignments as sections or scenes of a much larger piece. I can see how you could do well if we did these classes in a way that would create a novella or novel even. Sometimes that might make a static item not feel the most complete on its own but that's okay in this case since we know that there is more to go.

It does remind me a little of what I've seen in some shifter stories, some of the things that he shares with Sandra. Makes sense and will fit with things that readers of the genre will either know or easily be able to accept. This section does focus some on what it means to be a vampire, but when you have a character who is human and they just learned someone is anything else, that does make sense.

Other Notes: Overall, you have done well with the writing of this story. It is easy enough to read and nothing really stood out on the technical side. You have nice work here and are doing well in developing things even more. Next comes the hard part or fun part, depending on how you feel about the elements that put things into the erotica genre.

Have fun and keep writing.