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Thief of Hearts

[13+]
A Quatern poem inspired by an image prompt for the Dark Dreamscapes Poetry Contest.
by Jeff

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Review of Thief of Hearts

Review by PartyBee

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem was about a "love" gone bad.

WHAT I LIKED

I loved the repetition of "The cruel beast that stole her heart" and how it was placed in each quatrain.

STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 4 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme. Adding a layer of complexity to the poem, "The cruel beast that stole her heart" repeats in each quartrain; it's the 1st line in the opening quartern, the 2nd line in the 2nd quatrain, and so on.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The cruel beast who stole her heart," because there's a contradiction in that line. We have a cruel beast - evil and dastardly, and she falls in love with him. Is there something redeemable about him? I think all readers are attracted to the contradiction whether it be light/dark, good/evil, ying/yan etc.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader in with a nice, rhythmic beat and keeps them reading. The poem has a good beat when read out loud. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I enjoyed the flow and rhythm of the poem. You find yourself rooting for the girl even though you suspect it might not end well. Good expression.

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