This is a wonderful chapter. The title opens with a definite statement about the one of the characters-that she is different. This makes the reader wonder how she is different. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. You have set up your main characters and plot very well for the reader. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:
1)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.
The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.
You responded to this review 06/18/2024 @ 10:20pm EDT
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