This is an interesting story I was a bit confused as to who the he was in the first paragraph. The story was mostly told as opposed to shown. It made the places where you did show character or other elements of the story it seemed out of place. The bullies as characters were really flat. There were a lot of places where the story could have gone somewhere interesting. Like the quiz. Why is it in there did everyone take it or did the teachers want to see how far ahead she was. There is more to be said there. The bullies having something planned on the bus was another missed opportunity. As was the girl who sat next to her on the bus. You say they became friends but how? Is it because of things said or an awkward interaction ending in giggles. I want to see that part. It was just an unfulfilling story for me full of told details I do not care about because not enough was shown. What was the new friend's name. Where she get off the bus? If it was the same stop why did they not meet before?