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Hi Kevster,

I selected "What is love?" to review for you from your many portfolio items. You have produced a lot of work in a little over six months. Congratulations! I have a few thoughts to share with you that I hope will be useful. This is just the opinion of one person. Hold on to what parts resonates and help.

Overall impression: The title of a story can be the most difficult element of a story to choose and finalize. For me, stating the title as a question never fails to get my attention. I like reading stories with a title in the form of a question. You know the author intends to answer the question in the course of their story. The trick is to ask a question that is of interest to draw in multiple readers. It took a couple of opening statements that got me engage. The genre type "philosophy" is one that keeps me interested and reading. Your descriptive words regarding emotions and the state of mind of a person who is addicted to love fulfilled my wish to experience what they were feeling. Nice work!

You went into great detail educating on the types of love and the attributes connected to each kind. I learned a lot about the information provided. The topic kept my interest. There are a few typographical errors that slowed me down. For example, in the sixth paragraph, "But, what is love? The world has been used..." The word 'world' should be 'word.'

Visually, the typing is crowded. I had a difficult time moving my eyes along then dropping down exactly to the next line. The way to resolve that is with double spacing. The line spacing icon is close to the middle displaying a vertical arrow with a tip on each end and horizontal lines on the right. Click it and select 2.0 for line spacing.

The piece is categorized an article, reading more like an essay. The research studies the article refers to in several places should have citations to support the conclusions. Another concern I have is the high percentage, 75%, of the work of AI detected. When you use the AI, you need to disclose that. Relying so heavily on words that are not your own takes away individual creativity and possibly accuracy.

Thanks for writing about the question, "What is Love?" The article is summed up for me here: "True love, as defined like selflessness, in the most selfish way, places the happiness and well-being of the loved one above all." It is one of the most precious emotions life has to offer us.

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