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 Two Mix Ups Open in new Window. [ASR]
Gonna hope for the second mix up
by THANKFUL SONALI Library Class! Author Icon
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Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi THANKFUL SONALI Library Class! Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Two Mix UpsOpen in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

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Overall Impression. I found this little gem on the Read & Review feature. I found it to be a unique offering.

What a great idea for a contest entry. It's one of those "why didn't I think of that?" items. I guess some of those neurons rushing around one's head just don't seem to find the right path. *Wink*

But I do think you missed out on one part of your 'mix-up'. You wrote the entire thing as a mix up, apparently never intending to write an entry for that contest. I think you should have written at least one paragraph for real, and then decide to implement the 'mix-up'. It would make a stronger case for your efforts, in my humble opinion.

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Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* One missed capitalization.
 I know i'm being cheeky.  I'm

         *Bullet* Also I think you should add the following to your last line:
 ... and I hope the judge is feeling indulgent!!  

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My Rating.  4.0

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Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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