Hi raerae,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of disappointment. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if these three friendships will continue or be destroyed by infidelity. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a girl is betrayed by two people she felt close to. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is only one line of dialogue, and it is well done and realistic. The speaker speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)You have neglected to put commas before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.