A.I. [E] I just want my love automatic... |
HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORY Ryan is on opposite shifts with his wife and turns to A.I. for some companionship. It could only go bad, right? WHAT I LIKED I liked the ending. Ryan's got something to hide with A.I. but the ending kinda teaches him a lesson in a good way. POV NARRATION/TENSE This is told in the third person from Ryan's perspective. Good job with narration. Past tense is used appropriately. DIALOGUE The dialogue comes in at the end and accents the narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately. DESCRIPTIONS There's enough to set the scenes. I liked the description of Gal Pal A.I. "She'll always remember your birthday and you'll never have to fret about forgetting your anniversary." She sounds like the perfect Chat A.I. The description is lighthearted and a bit tongue-in-cheek, but it's something that could happen these days. SETTING TIME: modern day PLACE: Ryan's home This is something that is clarified for the reader. CHARACTERS Ryan Even though he's married, working opposite shifts takes a toll on him. He's easy to like and sympathize with. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening engages the readers and keeps them reading. The story has a great conversational tone to it which makes the reading fun. A lighthearted story that will bring a smile to your face.
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