Hello, Ben Haye II!

Welcome to Writing.Com! It's a super fun and supportive community and I hope you love it here.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

You conveyed a lot of enthusiasm in this religious history piece.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Earlier this week I read about Moses spending forty days on the mountain with the Lord and I remember thinking that the number forty came up in the Bible a lot. You shared some excellent examples.

I share your love of the Lord and His Word and your love of our country, so I enjoyed your article.

Imagine if all the Christians in our country dedicated ourselves to praying for our nation for forty days straight. That would be amazing.

I loved how your faith in the Lord and love for our country shined through this article of yours.

I loved that you included whole Bible verses, with references, that were relevant to the message of your religious history article.

I appreciated your call to action at the ending. It made for a powerful conclusion.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes in your religious history article.

I thought the genres you selected were perfect for this religious history article of yours.

Because you're new here, and I remember what it was like to really want to get to that first number ten of community recognition credits, I'm cordially inviting you to join my Habit Heroes challenge. You can earn an exclusive merit badge there every month. "Habit Heroes "  No pressure though! Just join if it appeals to you. The deadline to join for this month (and every month) is the seventh though, so if you are interested, be sure to sign up soon. It's free! And you can make your habit goals praying daily and reading the Bible daily if you like. That would fit in with your faith.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of a review challenge I'm in), I have a couple little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive feedback, read on, but if you want to skip this part, no worries at all! Just know that I enjoyed your article and skip on down to the next section.


I see that this is a piece you wrote before joining here as it says the year is 2020 and you joined in 2024. I'd recommend adding a little note at the bottom sharing when you originally wrote it and if it was published elsewhere. After reading it the second time, I noticed that statement in the description, but it'd still be nice to have below the main piece as apparently not all of us read descriptions the first time through.


Also, if you're adding a note anyway, it's always nice to know the word count of an article prior to reading it, so adding that for future readers might be appreciated.




CONCLUSION:
Your patriotism and faith shined through this religious history article and I enjoyed reading your take on the forty days and significance of the year 2020.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, faith, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!


Once again, welcome to Writing.Com! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


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