Hi Amethyst Agape Angel

Congratulations on your Writing.com account anniversary! I'm sending this review in honor of the occasion.


Positives

Since you went to the trouble of writing a poem for "Rhythms & Writing: Official WDC Contest" , I figured the least I could do was send you a review.

I really liked the structure of this poem and the way it reflected many of the ideas and emotions present in the original song. I thought you did a good job with the imagery, the content, and the hourglass structure was really inventive and intriguing. Nice work!


Suggestions

Based on the length of the poem, if this were an official entry and I were judging it, for me there was a little too much of the original in there for my tastes. While the structure was unique and you did use the song content to good effect, there was so much of the original song's imagery present that there wasn't as much of your own original work that I would have hoped. Again, from a strictly "if I were judging this for a contest" perspective. As a standalone piece, I think it's excellent.


Overall

Overall, I thought you did a really job with this poem and I greatly enjoyed the read. Well done!


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Respectfully,

Jeff
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