Hi PoeticPieces,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with anxiety and confusion. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if there is something creepy about the abandoned house. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a group of teenagers who decide to explore an old house which had been abandoned by its owners. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way ito the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.