Hi Ang1974,

This is a wonderful chapter. Chapter opens with speaker arriving at her destination. The reader is wondering what will happen next. They will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the story. The speaker is renting a car, and the reader wants to know exactly what her plans are. There is no dialogue in the chapter, but it is not needed here. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to put commas before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

2)You have neglected to either double space or indent between paragraphs. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.