TOUR DE PORTS 2024



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A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 

Hello, Serene Vanity!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

Wow! You clearly put a lot of thought into this existential philosophy essay. You gave me some nice food for thought too.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

You engaged my mind and emotions as I read this existential philosophy essay of yours.

I loved that you came to realize the beauty of humanity in imperfection and chose to admire it instead of "wallowing in despair all day." Perspective and choice are powerful. I hope you continue to choose the more empowering path.

I thought your ending was strong and true and memorable.

I loved the expression, "a face of raw artistic expression." Beautifully said.

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your existential philosophy essay.

I thought the genres you selected were perfect for this existential philosophy essay of yours.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:
In the spirit of helpfulness (and because of the rules of Tour de Ports review challenge I'm in require that, I have a few little suggestions to make your piece stronger. I know not everyone is interested in constructive feedback, so if you want to skip this part, no worries at all! Just move on to the next section and know that I enjoyed your existential philosophy essay.


In this sentence: "Rising and falling in an everchanging cascade of illusion." I think there should be a space between ever and changing. If you chose to make this change, your sentence would then look like this: "Rising and falling in an ever changing cascade of illusion." I believe that is more correct in English, although perhaps the word without the space is a new one unfamiliar to me.

I think that if your membership level allowed it, and you added a thumbnail image to this piece, it could get you more readers because photos really draw the human eye, as I'm sure you know.

I am not sure that "amorous" was used correctly in this piece, although your vocabulary is very high level, so maybe you know an alternate meaning for it that I don't. Maybe check the dictionary though, to be sure.


CONCLUSION:
You have an engaging and cerebral writing style and I greatly enjoyed reading your existential philosophy essay.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, thoughts, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!


Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler







Positive Hearts
A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 



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