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 Flight to Drake Passage. Open in new Window. [13+]
Once in a lifetime trip with a most unusual airline.
by Petra Pansky Author Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

This story took quite an unexpected turn. I didn’t suspect anything in the first paragraph. The narrator might have been a nervous passenger and that’s why they felt like they were in a fog as they were boarding. The number of passengers didn’t seem unusual either (depending on the size of the plane, of course) so maybe they hadn’t flown before. I would have expected a tale of some mishap during the flight, had it not been for the story’s description. What was so unusual about this airline?

The second paragraph started quite normal, too. Free meals and drinks - so this was some kind of luxury flight, got it. And then the captain added this line to the announcement: If you’re in need of painkillers… Wait… what? So there was something strange going on afterall. I paid close attention to the information brochure as the narrator was reading it, but I still didn’t get it - I assumed they were going to that place to see nature going wild, and I figured the passengers were thrill-seekers who didn’t mind the turbulence in order to take some breathtaking photos, or something along those lines. But that wasn’t what happened either.


*PenG* Suggestions:

I noticed a couple of small errors:

the worlds first and only airline
You need an apostrophe in “world’s”.

the Captains voice is heard
Again, just a missing apostrophe in “Captain’s”.

And I noticed that there is a period at the end of the title, which I don’t think is necessary.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

The ending was nicely done. That’s not to say that I didn’t have questions when I finished reading, but I like tales that make me think and I loved how it all came together at the end. This was a well written story and I enjoyed the read!




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