Hi Macklin,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering what Oliver will find if he explores the lands of Forevermore and Nevermore. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a young boy who finds the way into two enchanted lands while he is exploring his Grandmother's attic. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare in literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is formal. This is a fairy tale and this type of dialogue suits the genre very well. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.