Hi Sleepy,

This is a fantastic story. The tone is filled with pain and sorrow. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will be able to get passed their hurt and find a way to rebuild their life. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about someone who has been rejected by the one they love for someone else-their ex's ex no less. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and realistic. The story concentrates on the heart broken speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.