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 Summer Open in new Window. [E]
Short poem about the summertime
by Ang1974 Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem dedicated to the upside of summertime.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

There was a good, positive, fun vibe about the poem that really captured the essence of summertime.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a variation of a sonnet with 2 four line stanzas ending in a couplet with a total of 10 lines. There is an ABAB rythme scheme in the stanzas and AA with the couplet.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. If anything I might check WDC ML because I see a "{" at the start of the poem. And I might suggest increasing the font on WDC as it makes it easier to read here on the website.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Fresh cut grass, sea salt in the air, The talk and laughter of all that I hear" It's a very visual description and put the reader in the moment with the poet. A bit of a deeper level, these are the visual we expect of nature. This is the nature we enjoy and brings us happiness, these are the summer scenes that fill our hearts with warmth.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader with a nice, light beat. The title fits the poem. Easy expression for a warmhearted season.

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