This looks like the start of an interesting story. A young man sees a family move into a house with a less-than-nice history, and sees them do some odd things. As a result, he decides to investigate, especially about the one that's his age, trying to learn what's going on.

Characters
The characters seem interesting.

Spelling and Grammar
There are a number of areas where the punctuation needs some work, as there are areas where commas are placed in the wrong spot for instance.

Well, this is the BIG BAD WOLF, and I howl at the moon every night.
HOWLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


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