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 | lady and the tiger contest entry  [ASR] my entry to the lady and the tiger competion  |
| (4.5)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"   First Impressions: I remember this contest! Distantly - it was a long time ago  I don’t recall the exact requirements and I didn’t enter it back then, but I clicked on this story because it brought back fond memories. I’m sure this entry did well. It was an interesting take on the old story, although it felt a bit like cheating. The man didn’t get devoured by the tiger and he didn’t have to marry the lady he didn’t love, either. Instead, he found a she-tiger behind the door his beloved chose for him, and she had done that because she figured she would only have to wait until the she-tiger got bored of him before he would be hers. The important thing is that he trusted her. He wasn’t sure about it at first, but while people who analyse this story often talk about what would motivate the princess to choose one door over the other, there is his motivation to consider as well. Perhaps he would be happy with either outcome, knowing that’s what she wanted to happen.  Suggestions: This is obviously an old story so you’re probably no longer interested in edits. To be fair, I only have a few, small suggestions anyway: I would give the story a proper title. Your description says that it was an entry for the ‘Lady or the Tiger’ contest, so you don’t need to say it in the title as well, and something more catchy might attract more readers. a look that said I've looked at death many times and will not flinch. I would set off what the look conveyed in some way, although I’m not sure how best to do it. Single quotation marks, or italics maybe? As it is, the sentence needs a couple of reads to understand it. Marcus was well worth waiting for You missed off the period at the end of the sentence.  Final Thoughts: I’ve always found the original story fascinating, and there have been lots of different versions of it over the years. I think you did a good job with this one, which was a very original retelling with an interesting twist.    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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