Hi Serpentman,

This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about a snake who is frightened as wind sweeps away the sand that surrounds him. I love poems about animals, nature or both. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The rhyme is well done and consistent. It gives the poem a wonderful rhythm. The meter is consistent from line to line. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have not used punctuation in this poem, but this does not interfere with the flow of the poem. You have used grammar consistently here. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.