Hi angel,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering how these people will influence each other as time goes by. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a few people who live close to each other have very different lives, including two best friends. The story is narrative as opposed to conflict based. This is rare literature and very interesting. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. There is no dialogue in the story, but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to begin names with a capital letters. You should remember to consistently do this.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.