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The Writer's Cramp - 7-14-24 - W/C 461
by QueenNormaJean gettinPomsready
Review by Tiggy in Antigua
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

I’m pretty sure if I read this to my other half, he would nod in agreement and claim that we’ve had that exact same argument in the past. Not necessarily about how to fold a towel, but something similarly unimportant that only I can do and he never mastered. Well, unimportant to him. Okay, maybe we argued about towels. This is a very realistic story! *Laugh*

I was with Mary for most of this tale. The way she knew exactly how she wanted things done and wasn’t prepared to put up with anything less was hilarious. And she was even willing to draw a schematic! John, on the other hand, thought her behaviour was quite peculiar and wondered if she needed to see a doctor. He was very patient though and agreed to everything, even though he thought it was unreasonable. The only response he allowed himself, after Mary left the room, was to scream into the towel.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The readers obviously joined this argument while it was already in full swing, so the first sentence isn’t the first statement made. I did, however, feel that the beginning needed a bit more introduction. The opening line clearly refers to something that has just been said and it felt a little too out of context to start a story - if that makes sense. I was also not sure how the title related to the story. I’m guessing that perhaps either the title or the first line were the prompt for the contest? My only suggestions would be to make this a little clearer.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

I thought the story was very funny, perhaps in part because I could see myself in Mary’s character and felt I might have been guilty of similar demands in the past. This paragraph had me laughing out loud: “Expectations are unrealized resentments.” Mary stated this with authority, like it was a rule, such as gravity, or one of God’s ten commandments. Like John, I wasn’t sure how the statement was relevant, but the comparison to gravity or the ten commandments was hilarious. A great story!




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