Hi Esosa234,

This is a wonderful chapter. The chapter opens with Laura being shocked. The reader is wondering what has shocked her and will read on to find out. This is a fantastic opening hook. The detail puts the reader all the way into the chapter. They are wondering how Laura will handle an arranged marriage where she is so independent. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The chapter is well paced. It moves fast enough to keep all the reader's attention, yet it moves slowly enough to allow the reader to easily follow what is going on in the chapter. I did come across a couple of structural issues that need your attention:

1)In a few places you have neglected to put commas before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

2)You have neglected to put each piece is dialogue in its own paragraph. You should remember to do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. Great job.