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 A Random Act of Kindness Open in new Window. [13+]
How a random act of kindness creates an interesting chain of events
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Greetings,

This was a surprisingly fun and amusing story, written in the limited third person point of view of a veteran who needs a pair of legs and has to try and finagle them from the medical institution. I love how it’s set in a fictionalized world which feels like a gentle parody of the absurdities of war and post war in the real world. Your main character has a sense of humor which keeps the tone fresh and cheeky, and you’ve captured the sense of friendship and camaraderie which remains steadfast among veterans, no matter what world they occupy.

The act of kindness which ultimately led to Joe’s acquisition of two good legs is heartwarming and makes a great story. I would recommend you add two relevant genres to round it off, perhaps “War” and “Comedy” or something like that. Also, Size 4 Verdana font would create a more open and engaging reading experience. Aside from that, I can’t think of any substantial improvement to suggest. The characters are spunky, the conflict is well defined, the goals and stakes and obstacles, though relatively small, are present and create a scenario where we want to see what happens next and we cheer for the main character.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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