Hello, Penelope Moonbeam!

INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:

Wow! You wrote a fantastic August acrostic poem that captured many lovely summer joys.

Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I was poking about your port for something to review and thought this would be perfect for the occasion. I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting.

You engaged my senses and emotions as I read this August acrostic poem of yours. You also made me crave some watermelon.

I don't think I ever built sand castles at a lake, but I did at ocean beaches. Those times are fun memories that your poem evoked in me as I read it.

I loved that your thumbnail picture for this August acrostic poem of yours is perfect for the poem.

I appreciated that you made the first letter of each line in your August acrostic poem stand out with the red font and capital letter. It made the acrostic for August stand out well.

I like watching lightning bugs but don't try to catch them; just enjoy them.

Summer really is fleeting. Your last line captured that well. A sad but true note to end your poem with. Nice job.


IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER:

In the spirit of helpfulness, I have one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section.

Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!

In this line: "Using you vacation days up at Disneyland Parks," I think you have a typo and that "you" should be "your." This is because it's possessive. You is not the subject but the owner of the vacation days, if that makes sense. So, if you made this simple little change, your line would then look like this: "Using your vacation days up at Disneyland Parks." No worries if you don't want to make the change or think I'm wrong. It's your poem and the review is a gift, meant to be done with as you desire.


CONCLUSION:

You have a great writing style and I greatly enjoyed reading your fun August acrostic poem.

Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, spirit, and writing with the Writing.Com community!

Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler












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A Review from: "Positive Hearts Reviews Group" 


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