We are both in a somewhat melancholic state of mind I would say. You wrote this beautiful poem, I started prepping my memoir in "Shivering Saudade" [13+]. Both themes are "longing", as far as I can read it.
One thing I would change: two times "wishes". Perhaps the second time change it into "seeks" instead of "wishes for" in line 4? Just a thought.
The two lines most significant for me? Does the water truly admire the lost / Does the wind seek a mast
An integral center of your poem. I truly don't know what your poem wants to tell the reader but the atmosphere is beautiful, intimate, and tranquil. And your title suggests hope.
The poet is floating on the wide ocean, contemplating the situation. But there is a shore, there is hope and a vision, although it is fading.
Keep finding words for the feelings, emotions, and thoughts you have. Thanks for sharing.
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