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Alone  [E]
A poem I started. It's my first attempt at poetry.
by BoB_618
Review of Alone  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Dear BoB_618 ,

Intrigued by this first attempt at poetry with it's rigid form and concept that are giving me Jeopardy game show like clues before the reveal, and the subject partially known by title. Titles can be a dead give away in too many poems, so this seems the correct approach. I prefer the heading words to be obtuse, than not at all, with the god forbid, not another "Untitled." *Laugh*

There is a good write at work here as this poem paces nicely and makes clear and logic statements. Further, with this smooth read comes a rhyme that doesn't sound trite or forced, but knowledgeable. What I found additionally compelling, after I got past the notion it might sound like the good Seuss, was the allusion building. All the things that something is not and given the title, I felt a bit knowing of where this was leaning along the way.

What I find refreshing is that the title is not about depression, or being forced to be alone. With this poem comes the jesting, "it's not a crime to want to be alone." It's at this point I have to go back to the poet's list and see how this came to fruition. Looking at each of the phrases, I'd have to replace 'it' with 'alone', because of title and what you reference at the end. There might be more to this poem that I'm not seeing, or that wasn't fully conveyed. My math doesn't add up right.

I like this set up and how a word can substitute a word once the 'key' is given. This structure is a powerful device for poem, if a writer should find a subject to play with that can set up well for the guessing game of 'what is' or 'what is not'. I think reader's would enjoy this style of poem on the way to find truth in discovery by end. Many readers like it straightforward, as this poem can be. It's not cloaked in abstract expression to make us think. And for a first effort, it shows poetic ability in structure, flow, perhaps personification in that substitution process.

I found it a unique pleasure to consider this poem. You've given me new ideas and approaches to poetry that help me look at my craft in a different light.

Sincerely,

Brian
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