The Abyss and the Anchor" [E] Struggling with self-made despair, seeking to reclaim lost dreams and restore hope. |
Greetings and welcome to writing.com! Wow, I love this poem! It reminds me so much, if you’ll excuse my love of music, of the songwriting and lyricism of Imagine Dragons lead singer Dan Reynolds: moody and deeply introspective, with creative metaphors and simple, straightforward meter/melody. The rhythm could easily be transformed into a song, and I appreciate the message of hope at the end of your despair. You lead us along through the anxiety and confusion within your soul as you ponder the next step, and we feel compelled to believe in the sincerity of your thoughts as we see them here. The couplets are easy to follow, though perhaps I would suggest setting them off in groups of four or so to make it more open and accessible… which reminds me of my favorite recommendation for new and old members alike: Size 4 Verdana font for an engaging read that bounces off from our super busy sidebars. I would also recommend adding two more relevant genres such as “Emotional” and “Experience” or “Drama” and “Dark;” these three genres are important to help people find your item when browsing and also to qualify for as many Quill Award nominations as possible. (For more info on the Annual Quill Awards, check the portfolio of Lilli 🧿 ☕ .) This poem is good enough to enter into at least two contests around here: "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" and "Fox's Socks Newbie Poetry Contest" . I would encourage you to do so Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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