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 Masterly - Express it in Eight - 4-1-24 Open in new Window. [E]
Poem written in acrostic form regarding how a person is Masterly in their creations.
by Jolly Jingle Jtpete Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear Jolly Jingle Jtpete Author Icon,

Sometimes, I can come at a poem for feedback at odd angles and catch something that might reside, or my imagination might go into hyper overdrive and make up something there. This may be one of those experiences where I've been enlightened by a brief poem that references a quote from a former college basketball coach of note. I hope that my review doesn't stray too far from the poet's true intent.

Interesting, as I witness the oft composed acrostic, and it's a good thing we have our friend free verse to help make one such as this function so well. I cannot imagine squeezing the first letter of every line like this into a structured poetry form. The Wooden quote was familiar to me and assume from Express it in Eight activity as a prompt. Either way, with those first four lines, I felt the words flowing. Right from those nice line breaks within lines comes almost an internal rhyme...and that cadence that got me from "Soul" to "original." It makes me consider this type of rhyming structure that could be employed throughout a poem, just by taking a rhyming poem and free verse cutting it up with 'just so' line breaks...so these rhymes happen evenly but less noticeably by not ending hard on the end of a line like many do for emphasis, or punctuate that thought. I feel the approach to your narrative speaking style. from the outset, gave your poem a natural feel.

This effort of yours actually seems to become somewhat of a listing poem, as you offer reasons to back up statements as lists in two ways. I did catch an extra 'the' hanging out at the end of line three that was supposed to be, or is, the start of line four. Other than that, the message is clear and no one could argue these points. The overall message with the advice compiled within the poem comes together nicely.

The best sentiment in your output comes near the end of "Masterly" with "...Doubt is never/Replaced because you are continually growing, discovering, and
Loving what you are doing." It is true that if we focus on goals, don't step back, but be true to what we aim, it takes away those fears like failure that can shut one down and later live with regret for not trying. Your poem is "Giving the gift" of love to it's own creation to "truly make" a masterpiece. It was a pleasure to consider this poem for feedback.

Sincerely,

Brian
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