Hi Deepak Seegar,


This is a fantastic story. The tone is formal. It suits the story and plot very well. The reader is wondering if the deer will be hurt by the crocodiles. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a deer who risks a crocodile infested pond to get a drink. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on the speaker, and they come across as a real person. There is no dialogue but it is not needed here. The description is detailed and believable. It puts the reader all the way into the story. The story is well structured and consistent in terms of point of view and tense. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words. Great job.