Hi Vuckovic, This is a fantastic piece. The title is enigmatic and direct at the same time. The reader knows they will be learning about your life but not, exactly what will be in the piece. They are intrigued and will begin to read right away to find out more. You launch into the piece without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the piece. They will read to the last word to find out. You have given the reader a look at your life and your relationships. It is obvious you have had a hard like, and the reader is heart broken for you but is still delighted at the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the piece tedious. You use a formal, organized style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.
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