Into the Wind [ASR] entries for PPC5 |
Greetings, Lizzie, and welcome to writing.com! Ah, a poem which is not the expected trite autumnal stuff which most might make of such a prompt. I step back and admire how you’ve crafted the sense of unease and eeriness as the pumpkin speaks in the voice of a demon luring away young souls to a Halloween doom. We stop and ponder the meaning behind celebrating death, wondering what darker elements lie behind the frivolity of running around in costumes gathering candy. Every year it seems Halloween gets more and more elaborate and commercialized, until these days it’s become an equal to Christmas in the amount of space it consumes in stores and culturally, though it’s the exact opposite in theme and worldview. Have you seen the plastic teddy bear skeletons? I laughed when I first saw spider skeletons (consider that for a minute now…) about six years ago; they’ve been largely outdone by aliens and other impossible creatures. Perhaps pumpkin skeletons would be cool. I have nothing to suggest here; your lines measure nicely, and the free verse flows well. I’m preparing my own “rebel pumpkin poem” for this challenge, and though mine won’t be anything like yours, I’m happy to see I’m not the only one taking a more imaginative perspective. Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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