Hi brom21,


This is a wonderful story. The tone is filled with anxiety. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the scientists will find a way to strengthen the dome. They will read to the last word to find out. In the story, a group of scientists search for a way to improve a dome which incases the last humans to save them from destruction. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characters are well developed and believable. They come across as real people. The dialogue is well done and realistic. The characters speak like real people. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:



1)Do you know more of the dream!-like what the symbols were that lit up!”-This is a piece of dialogue and needs to begin with quotation marks.


The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.