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 When I was young and Foolish Open in new Window. [E]
for the weekly poetry challenge, based on a true story -when I hitchhiked the US in 1975;
by JCosmos Author Icon
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi JCosmos Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "When I was young and Foolish" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. Good morning. I found your item on the Read & Review feature. Please permit a non-poet to offer a few remarks on your humble offering.

I found your subject hit rather close to home with me as I was also young and foolish about a few things. I did a bit of hitchhiking while I was in college. But then I believe times were different back that, though I'm not trying to lessen the potential problems that may arise from that.

Still, you tried to show when we're young, not all our decisions are considered. But perhaps by divine means we survived. Of course, what were your alternatives when your pass was lost or stolen? You did what you needed to do.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* I noted a couple of punctuation issues. A careful read will show these problems, I'm sure.  One is a double comma in your second stanza.  

         *Bullet* Did you not capitalize the word 'young' in your title on purpose? Just curious.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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JACE

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