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 | Haiku autumn  [E] 17 sounds 5/7/5  |
| (5.0)    HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY!!! from "Anniversary Reviews"  Celebrating your writing this month with a review. Happy Account Anniversary Kotaro ,I'm back. I had so much fun reviewing you today, decided to travel further into your portfolio to see what else and found the folder with Haikus. I find Autumn is a good season for this poetry form. Looking at the short structured piece, I found use of the sensory to give a reader of sense and reminder of the season. The colors, naturally noted, are connected to sound. "Swooshes" right off makes me think of nylon material of a jacket, maybe pants, that serves as a protective layer as it gets colder or rougher on that trail. I feel motion at this point before "crackles and crunches" which play off each other a bit. There is the alliteration with hard C sounds that lend to the sensory depiction. What I get with 'crackles' are dry leaves. So, not wet but arid and between the time they fell and before they're compost. Meanwhile, crunches reminds me of something heavier being walked upon. Tying in the ending line about hiking, I'm noting that crackles are leaves that could kick up and crunches are all that lays on the ground with leaves, like dead branches. These are auditory sound so common and known so well as one with fond memories of time in our woods. So, leading into your summation, I find a spirited joy of hiking, having those beautiful send offs underfoot. I think at this point I get a nostalgic feeling, not only for myself, but from the narrative. You've depicted a colorful scene, calming and with life, even in autumn death. Hiking seems like something that is either routine or traditional, but the experience heightened during that time. Noting that final line takeaway, you really sell the experience to a reader and share how wonderful this must feel. I apply a lot my own memories in the mix, as I considered these words. Another joy to read and consider. I might look at a few more. Brian WDC Account Anniversary and Angel Army Reviewer    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/13/2024 @ 9:44pm EDT