Hoovsie at the Helm [E] Poem For Maryann's Star Trek Poem Contest |
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE POEM A poem about a cow and her friend in charge of the USS Enterprise as it ventures out into space. WHAT I LIKED I loved the creativity and fun nature of the poem. It made me smile. STRUCTURE This is free form poem. The 1st/2nd and 3rd/4th lines rythme, establishing a nice rhythm. MECHANICS I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read. DESCRIPTIONS I liked: "Follow a bull to the heavens, I ask of my crew, Without William Shatner, who knows what they'll do?" This is an easy going poem with several light hearted moments. What I liked about this description is the silliness of it, can you imagine a cow in charge with all their friends? William Shatner seems like a better fit. PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS The opening engages the reader by asking them to tap into their imagination and suspend what we know, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Imaginative and whimsical. A light heart read that makes the reader grin.
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