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 The Shepard Open in new Window. [E]
A Shepard who seeks pleasure in the rain, while his sheep wander around.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I love the sad scene you’ve painted here, of a man seeking peace in the cool, embracing rain. His moment of bliss and escape from the painful futility of his life is shattered by the harsh realization that what he did to make himself feel better has only made his situation worse and potentially brought harm to others in his care.

This theme strikes home for me on a deep level, as it seems like everything I take pleasure in doing is only an illusory escape from reality. The more I try to run from the difficulties of my life, the more they bounce back at me more complicated than ever. The consequences of running away only add up over time.

The scenic imagery is beautiful, showing us the sweeping, misty meadows where the sheep roam with picturesque words. The free verse is perfectly balanced, providing an easy, conversational medium to move the narrative forward.

The first thing I would suggest to correct is the word "shepherd," which has been misspelled by more people than I care to remember over the years. When I see the dog breed spelled as "German Shepard" I cringe mightily. Aside from that, I highly recommend using Size 4 Verdana font for an open and engaging reading experience. You can click on the question mark in the toolbar over the text entry box for help with Writing.com markup language.

I really enjoyed this poem.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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