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 It’s A Mess Open in new Window. [ASR]
Who I was and who I’ve become.
by Whiskerfacebythefireplace Author Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Hi Whiskerfacebythefireplace Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "It’s A Mess" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. Good morning. I found your story on the WDC Read & Review feature, and found it an interesting read.

In fact, I really liked the premise of looking back to look forward. Like you, I know I've improved over my several years of writing. But that forward momentum is hardly served by the use of the word "momentum". Is there a pace slower than a snail?

However, you actually have an essay written those few years aga from which you might gauge your progress. I was never really into journaling--something I profoundly regret now. You have a platform from which you can base your writing journey. And I wish you success on that journey.

I found your style of writing fun and easy to read. Your sentence structure is good, and I'm afraid I have nothing to mention in my next template section. (Psst, that's where I put the things I found wrong.)

One can only hope you've improved even more in the two years since this essay. "It's a Mess"--we've all been there.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

*Star* My Rating.  5.0.  Thanks for sharing a bit of you with us.

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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