Hi Jay,


This is a fantastic poem. The tone is formal. It suits the poem and subject matter very well. The poem is about someone enjoying watching some bright white lights. There are many times I have enjoyed the peace of sitting and watching nothing in particular, just the lights and scenery around me: just to relax. I loved this poem and read to the last word. The Haiku poetic form works well in this poem, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. You have concentrated on one specific image here, the bright lights. The poem flows extremely well. It is a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.