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 Review #4777629 |
 | Free Association  [E] free association writing  |
| (4.5)    HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY!!! from "Anniversary Reviews"  Celebrating your writing this month with a review. Happy Account Anniversary Mindcrime ,Your poem felt a bit like a fantasy story experience with one alone and unable to know what is out there, what they might face...akin to life as I read it. And, it feels it is about one who is young but must venture alone on their journey and wonder if a savior will come. It's a bit religious themed but not described as such. You provide imagery that gave a good sense of place at the outset. This poem attempts to cover and a lot of territory, some of which I considered from experience and my mind’s eye. “Free Association” feels deeply rooted in one's past and experience, what we've learned early on and the consequences faced. It feels like there is going to be a conflict where someone or many needed to step up and support. There are weakened souls out there, as it reads. It feels like a world in decay and a reversal is needed. It's just free associated words, but they connect to memory. It suggests what one struggles with alone, wishing for like-minded aid. That is why in the last verse "Turn away,/lift a hand. It's like a direction to that other. You have to wonder if we try to self-motivate or if we judge the world today for the direction it's headed. Subconsciously, the speaker and poet as one, are conflicted and feel like those who say "I'm only one person. What can I do?" like self-defeat. This poem is fighting back the tides that force us apart rather than join together. Lincoln's famous 'A house divided" is recalled and it's so apparent that the division isn't a civil war, but a war from within. It starts with each individual who's chosen to check out, take the easy way out. The future will be filled with people who won't be able to survive when we should be cast in another nationwide to global catastrophe. Level-headed, focused and ideologically sound people are rare and can be assembled, but corporations and government that shred the fabric of all and force a nation to fight among themselves, control humanity just for that bottom dollar. I get all of this from your insightful, free associated expression of words. Write on! Also, you have a bit of anaphora going on in the hub of this creation with the repetition of "Who will." It’s powerful, turns those lines into gleaming hammers. The narrative does give a reader much to pause and ponder, especially post read. It has invoked my own feelings, as you have read. Brian WDC Account Anniversary and Angel Army Reviewer    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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