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Hi LightinMind Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Invalid Item" Open in new Window..

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. Good morning. I found your poem on the Writing.Com Read & Review feature.

Your words hit close to home. I'm pretty certain any couple who has been together for several to a lot of years has felt the cooling of love's first flame. That cooling happens so slowly over a long period that we fail to recognize such a thing is even happening.

You've penned a poem in an a-a-b-b-c-c rhyming pattern lamenting how our perceptions of each other change over the years. Your plea is a valid one, though much easier to see after the fact. Schooling, jobs, dating, family and life all spread tentacles around the joy and love we feel early on. That love still remains, but it becomes tempered. You recognize this too.

Your title softens my own feeling: Love is work.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

I've nothing to offer by way of improvement from a technical standpoint.

*Star* My Rating.  5.0. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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