Hi MMJ,

This is a fantastic entry. The title is enigmatic and attention grabbing. It tells the reader very little about what the entry is actually about. They are intrigued and will begin to read immediately to find out more. You launch into the entry without introduction or preamble. This takes all the reader's attention and focuses it completely on the topic and the entry. They will read to the last word. You have written about your struggle to become the person you want the most to be. The reader is delighted with the look they get at you as a person as well as a writer. The length is perfect. You completely develop your topic without belaboring the issue and making the entry tedious. You use an emotional style that is very appealing to the reader. Great job.