Hi Aaron,

These are powerful, fantastic lyrics. The tone is aggressive. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering if the speaker will convince their friend to not take their life. They will read to the last word to find out. The free verse works well in these lyrics, and you have handled it very well. There is a wonderful rhythm here. The lyrics flow extremely well. They are a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in these lyrics. There is nothing to distract the reader from their reading pleasure. Great job.