Hi JSeanAuthor,

This is a wonderful story. The tone is full of confusion and pain. It grabs all the reader's attention and makes them want to read on. The reader is wondering why Archie decided to take his own life. They will read to the last word to find out. The story is about a man who is grieving the death of his life partner who has committed suicide. The conflict is well defined. There is no doubt about what is going on here. The characterization is fully developed and believable. The story concentrates on James, and he comes across as a real person. The dialogue is well done and realistic. James speaks like a real person. The description is detailed and vivid. It puts the reader all the way into the story. I did come across one structural issue that needs your attention:

1)In a few places you neglected to put commas before coordinating conjunctions. You should remember to consistently do this to keep your writing clear for your reader.

The story is consistent in terms of point of view and tense. Great job.